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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 4, 2018 23:12:00 GMT
I understand that editing of this file will be considered cheating and the character will be deleted Toan Hao |
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Post by maizewafer on Mar 6, 2018 5:41:35 GMT
my second attempt at a gm application - you have spent way too many points when using point buy, we use a 20 point buy (here's a calculator you can use: jody-white.com/pathfinder-ability-score-calculator.php) - you need to list the skill points you gain from your class in the class recorder box (monks get 4/level) - you need to list how many monk levels you have (1) - you can only place a number of points into each skill equal to your level (1 at level 1, 2 at level 2, etc.) - your monk ac bonus applies to touch ac and flat foot ac - you are proficient with clubs - improved unarmed strike doesn't let you attack with your hands full - you should list the damage your unarmed strikes do (i recommend adding them as a weapon in your weapons list - you gain 3 feats total (1 from monk, 1 from human RT and 1 from level 1) - you should list the number of times you can use stunning strike per day (in feats and special abilities), its save dc and its effect - you haven't selected your 2 character traits - you are not proficient with the wave blade and take and take a -4 penalty on attack rolls with that weapon - you have to list the cost of each item you buy after its name [eg, waveblade (5gp)] - you gain the monk outfit for free because it costs less than 10gp - your gold is wrong - you don't calculate gold weight (put gold in the weight n/a column) - you have no backstory |
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 6, 2018 7:14:46 GMT
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Post by maizewafer on Mar 6, 2018 7:32:52 GMT
a few problems still
- your point buy is still too high (you're 2 over)
- you should list stuff you gain from your racial traits, ability scores in another column under class recorder (name it "ability scores, traits, feats, etc." or something similar)
- you are required to have a ranged weapon of some sort (get a javelin or sling if you don't want one, they are dirt cheap)
- you haven't listed the amount of exp you need to get to level 1 (its 1300)
- you didn't list the price of the monk outfit (you do this even though it is free [so put something like "free/5gp"])
- you have not chosen a favoured class
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 6, 2018 8:09:32 GMT
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 6, 2018 8:18:50 GMT
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Post by maizewafer on Mar 6, 2018 8:31:04 GMT
a few problems still
-you need to list the bonus skill points you get from you racial trait in another box under class recorder (name it "ability scores, traits, feats, etc." or something similar)
- you didn't choose a favoured class bonus (if you choose 1 hp list it under the FC hps section of the monk bar in class recorder, if you choose skill rank put it in a new row in class recorder totaled "FC ability", if you select the human bonus list it under feats and features (as well as the number of times you have taken it))
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 6, 2018 8:58:28 GMT
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Post by maizewafer on Mar 6, 2018 9:10:05 GMT
a few problems still
-monks only get 4 skill points/you list the skill points granted by class abilities in a new row title "ability scores, traits, feats, etc." or something similar
- you only gain 1 skill point from skilled
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 6, 2018 9:14:56 GMT
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Post by maizewafer on Mar 6, 2018 9:57:51 GMT
- you should list flurry of blows in your weapon attacks
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 8, 2018 1:20:09 GMT
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Post by maizewafer on Mar 8, 2018 4:35:36 GMT
I approve this Character! : D
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Post by Kristal Moonhand on Mar 8, 2018 4:37:48 GMT
As an official DM, I officially approve this character as well as officially approving Maize's approval!  |
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Post by sonicman033 on Mar 22, 2018 2:30:15 GMT
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